From ainsley@kudonet.com Sun Aug 4 01:02:47 1996 Date: Thu, 27 Jun 1996 13:30:16 -0700 (PDT) From: Ainsley Reply-To: b5-creative@lists.best.com To: b5-creative@lists.best.com Subject: Villanelle again. (redone) >From ainsley@kudoThu Jun 27 13:29:02 1996 Date: Thu, 27 Jun 1996 13:28:44 -0700 (PDT) From: Ainsley Subject: Villanelle (fwd) ---------- Forwarded message ---------- Date: Thu, 27 Jun 1996 11:22:01 -0700 (PDT) From: Ainsley To: b5-creative@lists.best.com Subject: Villanelle Okay. This is sort of a repost. :) I did a quick check and realized that in my haste to express myself, I forgot half of the villanelle's form: the rhyming pattern. So. I redid it. There are two lines that I am not pleased with at all, (The same two from the first version) so any suggestions will be mightily appreciated. Nota Bene: I chose the villanelle sonnet form as a way to express Londo's inner romanticism and dichotomy. Does it work? I'm not sure. Ains ------------------------------------------------------------ --'--,-<@ Londo's Villanelle @>-'--,-- Deadly silver angelfish sailing by A porthole window within a thin tin can-- A silent, graceful glimmer in the night. How empty this room, this tender heart's lie; Wine, women, song: fleeting pleasures that cannot stand Deadly silver angelfish sailing by Heart's ease broken in a green bottle's sigh Easy losses to fill a broken soul-- A silent, graceful glimmer in the night. A path to glory shimmers within lies A scarlet seat and cold glittering gold-- Deadly silver angelfish sailing by Honor gained then lost as death bares its bite. Anguish and denial burden with their demands-- A silent, graceful glimmer in the night. True love's pretense lost within murder's blight, Hot tempers flash at sorrows last command-- Deadly silver angelfish sailing by A silent, graceful glimmer in the night.